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mood swung
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Post by mood swung »

sorry. I'm either (well, at least in my own mind) really great at titles or they just suck, so this one ain't been named yet.



They don't tell you the downside before
the metamorphosis.
That once you become a sea creature,
you can't crawl back up on the beach.
You can't devolve.

Water fills my dreams.
An almost fish breathes emerald bubbles.
Drowning, not drowning
in a liquid prison
wanting to vanish
to do something complete
to leave a permanent scar.

They say Jesus walked on water.
I say the reall miracle is swimming in it.






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ok, so tell me, what hits you? don't worry about my feelings, I'm just curious to know if the emotions I tried to convey got thru.
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Title: 'Gregor's Day at The Beach'? Gave me the Kafka feel of the story plus you did say "metamorphosis."
"Be yourself; everyone else is already taken."
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Post by Gillibeanz »

I really liked this MOODS. I can really feel your struggle - a clever piece of work!
COME ON YOU SPURS!!
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